The Raging Sea
Shhh, peaceful and silent
like a snoozing cat,
As slow as a turtle,
Stormy clouds devour the
sky,
A gentle wind gains more
strength,
As the sea awakens from its
slumber,
Rising slowly…. Slowly….slowly….
CRASH!!!!
The raging warrior prepares
for a bloody battle,
The sea transforms into an
erupting volcano,
As the shore waits
defenceless,
His terrifying talons slash
the sea into tremendous waves,
The dark devil has risen,
Raging robbers steal
precious lives,
As the ferocious dragon has
slays the shore,
Shhh, the devil has done his
work,
As silent as the darkest
night,
The tranquil waters rest,
The shore is relieved to
survive the violent storm.
i like your vocab and your good words
ReplyDeleteWell done gurindeer you have wrote a fantastice peace of poem.
ReplyDeletewell done adam your poem is good your verses all rym
ReplyDelete* Good use of emphasise ( slowly, slowly CRASH )
ReplyDeleteI like the similie that says the sea transforms into an erupting volcano,but you could carry on this to make it more affective.
ReplyDeleteWELL DONE ADAM!!! you have used similies and metaphors like 'the devil' . next time keep on your excellent progress , but try to rhyme and keep on task while doing this.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you described the sea as an erupting volcano and the opening stament.
ReplyDeletegood description in it like the tranquil seas and similes such as as silent as the darkest night.
ReplyDeleteWell done Adam good use of verbs adjectives and nouns
ReplyDelete*lots of wow words and adjectives
ReplyDelete*great description of the sea
you could add some elipces
wELL DONE GOOD USE OF VERBS
ReplyDeleteI liked the poem when you done the power of three's and your sentences. I think you should improve on doing more better words.
ReplyDelete*You have used similes in your sentences
ReplyDelete*You have used vocabulary like violent
You could improve on better opening sentences
i like the way you turned calm to viliont
ReplyDeleteyou have lots of affecyive writing
ReplyDeletelike the werd tremendous
I think Adam's work was fantsastic, due to the fact you used so many adjectives, the three types of sentences and lots of adjectives.
ReplyDeletewell done i think it was a great poem
ReplyDeletei like the elipsies and the slowly slowly slowly. Good job.
ReplyDeletei liked the way you used the power of 3 fantastic peice of work
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